i wrote a poem, does it suck

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summer and a resort near the water
dan spent the nights tending

selling stoned kids candy bars
making change for bored retirees

a life of leisure,
a life of sneaking bar food and drinking
clandestinely

like one of those i found myself books
by a minor american novelist

then a wife
a pregnancy scare
and a one bedroom apartment in the big city

the novels never end like this

ase

― anthony easton (anthony), Wednesday, 15 January 2003 06:25 (twenty-two years ago)

Some novels do end this way...except usually the pregnancy scare precedes the marriage.

No it does not suck.

― Ryan McKay (Ryan McKay), Wednesday, 15 January 2003 10:08 (twenty-two years ago)

I quite like it. But why does poetry have to be sad?

― Nick Southall (Nick Southall), Wednesday, 15 January 2003 10:58 (twenty-two years ago)

'cause life is.

― michael wells (michael w.), Wednesday, 15 January 2003 11:00 (twenty-two years ago)

I don't think it is though, certainly not mostly.

― Nick Southall (Nick Southall), Wednesday, 15 January 2003 11:07 (twenty-two years ago)

I like it.

― Andrew Thames (Andrew Thames), Wednesday, 15 January 2003 12:59 (twenty-two years ago)

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― Momus (Momus), Wednesday, 15 January 2003 13:05 (twenty-two years ago)

i do momus thank you

― anthony easton (anthony), Wednesday, 15 January 2003 18:28 (twenty-two years ago)

It's your best poem yet

― the pinefox, Wednesday, 15 January 2003 18:46 (twenty-two years ago)

I really like the poem, Anthony.

But why does it end in 'ase?'

― Sarah McLusky (coco), Wednesday, 15 January 2003 18:48 (twenty-two years ago)

(ase = anthony's intials I think!)

― jel -- (jel), Wednesday, 15 January 2003 18:50 (twenty-two years ago)

that would be it.

― anthony easton (anthony), Wednesday, 15 January 2003 18:53 (twenty-two years ago)

Ah-ha!

I will shut up now.

― Sarah McLusky (coco), Wednesday, 15 January 2003 18:54 (twenty-two years ago)

Anthony that was really great.

― mark p (Mark P), Wednesday, 15 January 2003 19:14 (twenty-two years ago)

But what about Dan?????

― Dan Perry (Dan Perry), Wednesday, 15 January 2003 21:01 (twenty-two years ago)

I like it. If you are looking for edits, I'd start with stanza 3.

― bnw (bnw), Thursday, 16 January 2003 00:04 (twenty-two years ago)

That was beautiful. It is the best one yet! Makes me think of what my life probably would have been like if I was straight.

― Arthur (Arthur), Thursday, 16 January 2003 05:43 (twenty-two years ago)

arthur, where is my email.

byron-why stanza three?

― anthony easton (anthony), Thursday, 16 January 2003 06:13 (twenty-two years ago)

I just sent it! Of course it's late, you know me.

― Arthur (Arthur), Thursday, 16 January 2003 07:04 (twenty-two years ago)

Best. Poem. Ever.

― Dan I., Thursday, 16 January 2003 08:08 (twenty-two years ago)

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