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Do not weep, maiden, for war is kind.
Because your lover threw wild hands toward the sky
And the affrighted steed ran on alone,
Do not weep.
War is kind.

Stephen Crane, who i used to like

― anthony, Saturday, 8 June 2002 00:00 (twenty-three years ago)

What exactly is the problem? I like it. Very Stephen Crane. Explain.

― , Sunday, 9 June 2002 00:00 (twenty-three years ago)

Its goffy. its uncrane because it goes on for whole pages.

― anthony, Sunday, 9 June 2002 00:00 (twenty-three years ago)

Oh. I thought it was one of those little toss-off cynical verses. Like: A man said to the universe: "Sir, I exist!" "However," replied the universe, The fact has not created in me a sense of obligation."

― , Sunday, 9 June 2002 00:00 (twenty-three years ago)

How do make line breaks in this infernal contraption?

― , Sunday, 9 June 2002 00:00 (twenty-three years ago)

J to the ewel.

― bnw, Sunday, 9 June 2002 00:00 (twenty-three years ago)

'jewel inspires me as a person', a PERSON!, new highs

― jm, Sunday, 9 June 2002 00:00 (twenty-three years ago)

I think managing to spell Bukowski wrong off the bat isn't the best start for ol' Jewel, is it now?

― Dom Passantino, Sunday, 9 June 2002 00:00 (twenty-three years ago)

mmm..burgundy velvet short-shorts...

― gabe, Tuesday, 11 June 2002 00:00 (twenty-three years ago)

My love is like a red red rose
For she always has muddy toes.

― Pete, Tuesday, 11 June 2002 00:00 (twenty-three years ago)

Anyone see that song I wrote when I was 13 that was posted to an earlier thread? I nominate that.

― Dan Perry, Tuesday, 11 June 2002 00:00 (twenty-three years ago)

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